The Dresser – back of the drawer #WEPFF

Kalpanaa

I write about divorce in India

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27 Responses

  1. Arlee Bird says:

    That was an interesting twist. Nicely told.

    Arlee Bird
    Tossing It Out

  2. Kalpanaa says:

    Thank you Arlee 🙂

  3. Annie Thomas says:

    Surprise and all too familiar. Relieved that she leaves. Meets my needs for hope.

  4. Annie Thomas says:

    Posted in haste. Wanted to share that I enjoyed the read…its been a while, and Happy birthday! <3<3

  5. Excellent take on the prompt! Hope she can bring the criminal to justice.

  6. patgarcia says:

    How sad for the woman before her. How lucky she is that she was able to read that letter.
    Your story had me so involved with what was happening to her.
    Shalom aleichem,
    Pat G

  7. hilarymb says:

    Hi Kalpanaa – I hope she has the courage to stay away and run further away to protect herself. Those sorts of people exist – and need to be brought to justice … your chest made sure you knew and could tell the story to the world, so he get his come-uppance … brilliantly told – cheers Hilary

  8. Oh Gosh! What a narration and injecting the fear factor with aplomp. Superbly told.

  9. Loved this, so well constructed. The hopelessness and surrender, captured beautifully. Yes, please let her be safe! Masterful flash fiction!

    Thank you, Kalpanaa, so wonderful to have your entry for the WEP Challenge!

  10. Another well told creepy tale.

  11. Jen says:

    I really enjoyed this, Kalpanaa! A wonderful and chilling tale. I’m very glad to know she left. Let’s hope she stays away!

    Very well done!
    Jen

  12. Denise Covey says:

    Wow, Kalpaana, I loved this. What a lot of beautiful description. Then the floods. So much. I wasn’t expecting that twist, but I was expecting something. This is such a wonderful entry for the Back of the Drawer prompt. Run, girl, run. And oh those parents!!

    Thanks for posting for WEP. Your entry really adds to the mix!

    Denise 🙂

  13. Olga Godim says:

    Wow! What a letter to find on a rainy day! Just shows that arranged marriages don’t work, doesn’t it?

  14. Donna L Hole says:

    Oooh; such awesome layers building to the crux. Well done on the cultural terms too. I liked how it seemed to sad, then a bit disturbing, and finally Victory. Decisiveness. A beautiful story.

  15. Wonderful writing – so glad she took the advice in the letter and left.

  16. lauraclipson says:

    I think this might be my favourite so far, I wasn’t expecting that ending! Great job with the prompt.

  17. Toi Thomas says:

    This was sad and scary, so engaging. You can’t help but to root for her, hope she gets away, stays safe, and maybe even finds a way to put him away for his crimes. Lovely, tragic, and hopeful. Thank you.

  18. Woo hoo, a monster lurks. I hope she gets away. Love the description and the sense that she has lost herself already before she finds the letter.
    Nancy

  19. DG Hudson says:

    Wow, I really liked that and I’m glad she had the strength to listen to the words in the letter. A sadistic man who thrived on dominating others. I liked the ending and seeing the photo image of the dresser. Imagine a dresser that decided which drawer it would allow to be open – that was an interesting element to the tale.

  20. artman413 says:

    An Indian take on Bluebeard…very nice!

    I really love the descriptions you use. The asexual dresser with its cavernous drawers topped by a myopic mirror. It really does paint a fantastically gloomy picture and reflects your protagonist’s mood so well.

  21. Debbie D. says:

    How sad to be stuck in a loveless, arranged marriage. This story had a wicked twist! 🙂 I love that she heeded the advice in the letter. Your description of the old dresser really brought it to life, even without the image.

  22. C9ngratulations on winning this month’s WEP Challenge. An excellent story, with some interesting twists. Well done.

  23. SoulMom says:

    Wonderful writing and congratulations on winning it!

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